you forget your bag in the gym and gym management announced that the gym will be closed for a week for some renovation work You need your bag as it has important things in it Write a letter to the manager of the gym In your letter introduce yourself and d

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you forget your bag in the gym and gym management announced that the gym will be closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has important things in it.
Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In your letter
• introduce yourself and describe your position
• give them a description of your bag
• tell them what you want them to do

Dear Mr Ajay,

My name is Arshdeep singh,I have been the permanent member of your gym since 2014 and my membership card number is 564. Recently, I got the news to hear that the gym will be closed for seven days in order to renovate.Therefore, I am writing this letter to inform you about my bag which I had forgotten in your gym locker that was allocated to me use regularly.

Firstly ,I would like to tell you that the color of my bag is black and it has three big zippers. If I talk about the things, it has power bank as well as my laptop include my driving licence and debit card.I have to collect all these things before going outside in an every morning.

I am hoping from you that you will find a way to hand over me all these precious things in the next coming two days.

I am looking forward to hearing you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Arshdeep singh

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...ar Mr Ajay, My name is Arshdeep singh,I have been the permanent member of your ...
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Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...sed for seven days in order to renovate.Therefore, I am writing this letter to inform you...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...llocated to me use regularly. Firstly ,I would like to tell you that the color ...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...clude my driving licence and debit card.I have to collect all these things before...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... things in the next coming two days. I am looking forward to hearing you soon....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, so, therefore, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 714.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 164.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35365853659 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38198548449 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670731707317 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.714137214 44.8134815571 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 16.8248392259 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 4.34317383033 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270516443554 0.216113520407 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112315406476 0.0766984524023 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920243280557 0.0603063233224 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129449369396 0.12726935374 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108651518848 0.0580467560999 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 70.7449484536 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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