You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo

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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

Correct the information in the article

Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing the letter to request to correct some mistakes in your recent released travel magazine which name is “Le voyage”, There are some information relate to my home town is incorrect and misleading.

I am a local resident in the city of Chongqing , China, So I get familiar with most of the landmarks and tourist attractions here. In the page 131 of your magazine said “the entrance of the ancient tower HONGYA cave is located at the level 1” but actually it is located at the level 12 because the tower is built along the cliff.

From my point of view, It is quite a serious mistake and could mislead the traveller who were first been there. Actually, as a flagship magazine in the tourist industry, Providing accurate and detail information is benefit for you and your company.

Therefore, could you please correct the mistake as soon as possible and make an amendment notice in the next public of the magazine.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Your faithfully

Elliot

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... local resident in the city of Chongqing , China, So I get familiar with most of t...
^^
Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to hear from you soon. Your faithfully Elliot
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 32.9175257732 46% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83615819209 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60628143944 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.64406779661 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1135840483 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 4.34317383033 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241021207862 0.216113520407 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902362210629 0.0766984524023 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780487210071 0.0603063233224 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115114057341 0.12726935374 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851076546868 0.0580467560999 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 8.62886597938 197% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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