You have recently moved to a new neighborhood and would like to join a sports center there You have found a private sports club Write a letter to the manager of the sports club In your letter introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports cl

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You have recently moved to a new neighborhood and would like to join a sports center there. You have found a private sports club.

Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter,

- introduce yourself
- say why are you interested in this sports club
- ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc.

Dear Sir,

I am Kyle. Recently, I moved from British Columbia to Brampton, Toronto city. I am writing this letter to you to get some information about joining your sports club.

As I am very health conscious person and keen interest in sports. Before moving here, I was a regular member of fitness club in B.C. Without doing any physical activity, I felt incomplete myself. After moved in new neighborhood, I heard a lot about your club from my friends and relatives. Then, I made my mind to join your club. Also, the majority of the members are of my age and it would be easier for me to befriend a few of them. Most importantly, your club remains open at weekends which is quite useful for me to spend enough time in club.

But, before joining your club, I have some queries to you. Does there any swimming or gaming area for children? Actually, I want to bring my child with me, to do some kind of activities here. Also, want to know the membership fee for joining this too.

I am eagerly awaiting a response from your side.

Yours sincerely.
Kyle.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am Kyle. Recently, I moved from Britis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, so, then, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 876.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53886010363 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4464848652 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.658031088083 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8732174474 44.8134815571 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.5714285714 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7857142857 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 4.34317383033 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265098107328 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829589476021 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108252462507 0.0603063233224 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147269628174 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936318692133 0.0580467560999 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 8.37731958763 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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