You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make c

Essay topics:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1

The two graphs show student enrolment trends over a ten-year period from 2000-2010 in Australian universities Overall the two graphs clearly demonstrate increasing demand for Australian university education by overseas students increasing 400 percent with a significantly smaller increase by local students just 50 percent for this period.

The first graph clearly shows that new overseas students continue to enrol in Australian universities In 2010 there were approximately 80000 overseas students around half of whom were new students The rate of increase in the number of international students has been dramatic, doubling every five years, from just under 9000 in 2000 to 1000 in 2005 and then over 20000 in 2010.

The local student population was around 600,000 in 2010,200,000 of which were new students. Thus, new students comprised 33 perrcent of the local total, which represents a significant decline from 50 percent ten years before. The trends clearly demonstrate that growth can be expected to continue from overseas students but not for local students.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in 2005 and then over 20000 in 2010. The local student population was around 600...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, then, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 32.9175257732 9% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 909.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50909090909 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85507940705 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 127.690721649 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587878787879 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.13402061856 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 12.6804123711 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 16.3608247423 202% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.42989662 44.8134815571 269% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 181.8 76.5299724578 238% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 33.0 16.8248392259 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312980552267 0.216113520407 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168586317577 0.0766984524023 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900555064201 0.0603063233224 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231614131401 0.12726935374 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067850908178 0.0580467560999 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.0 8.37731958763 251% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 70.7449484536 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 7.45979381443 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.27 8.71597938144 175% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 8.62886597938 336% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.2 8.54432989691 178% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.