After completing school and before going up to college or university some students take a year off either to work or travel What do you think is better traveling or working Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approach

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After completing school and before going up to college or university, some students take a year off either to work or travel. What do you think is better traveling or working. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approach.

After completing school and before starting moving to college or university, few learner’s make a gap from their studies and like to do working as well as traveling to fresh their mind and body. Here, I would like to discuss both prons and cons in the upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with the benefit of working first and foremost, school goers can learn different type of skills by working. For example, communication skills, work experience and so on which help them not only to keep touch with well educated people’s but also they get optimum opportunity tu earn money. As a result, they can save this money for their studies as well as future.while, traveling is very lucrative to uplift the standard of knowledge by visiting one country to another students get knowledge about different cultures and languages and make some new friends to share their feelings with them. It is not only broden their horizon of knowledge but also make their bondings strong with other culture people.

Here are some demerits of this phenomenon. firstly, if learner’s give preference to work after completing their school instead of continue their study. So that, they distract from their studies and become money addicted which should be detrimental for them and spoil their life with their own hands. However, by traveling one country to another by which many learner’s get influence by that country culture and adopt it. So that, there own culture take a back seat which should be detrimental for them to avoid their own culture.

To recapitulate, it is vividly said that every coin has two sides. But in my point of view, it is not a bad idea to work or travel to some extent and they have to give more preference to their studies to make their career bright which is beyond comparison.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, well, while, for example, as a result, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91803278689 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66766397189 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547540983607 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9375713354 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.384615385 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140860560819 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568266105767 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566105495171 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107160636994 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660512119634 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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