Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
The career such as a famous star or sports personality have several negative aspects. However, there are some advantages of working in these jobs. In this essay, both ideas will be examined.
On the one hand, being a celebrity can lead to various problems. Firstly, they might have a lack of privacy or freedom since everything that they did outside their house, people will know and focus on them in every single step. To give an example, during weekend, if you are a famous people and just want to relax at some restaurant with your friends, you will have rarely chance without facing to somebody they know you. As a result, you have to look after your personality all the time when staying with your friends. Furthermore, as a role model, they have to take higher responsibility than other jobs. For instance, before filming, they have to do a lot of homework in order to make sure that filming process will be smooth. This can make them felt so stressful every day. Lastly, they have to behave generously with others, namely did some charitable activities and posted on social media even you didn’t want to do because children will follow their role models. Otherwise, if famous star did somethings bad, it can lead to serious problem to young people.
On the other hand, there are also some benefits in this career. First of all, celebrity gain faster incomes than other jobs. In Thailand, Filming in an advertisement, for example, which might take only a week, they received nearly of million baht for superstar comparing to office workers that worked for a year and gained less than that. Finally, famous people have a greater chance in business fields. This was a result from their popularity in profiles. For example, in Korea, the majority of Korean star likely to sold their own beauty products in social media like Instagram which had a lot of based followers. As a consequent, they didn’t have to use money in promotion since it can reach to many audiences by itself.
In conclusion, even though there are numerous drawbacks that happened to celebrity such as a famous film star, I believe that this career can bring a variety of advantages. If celebrity think before they act and happy with the job they did, they will gain many profits from this wonderful career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82278481013 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47526329445 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546835443038 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9548646214 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7142857143 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09523809524 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18370682456 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559501554188 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584316335128 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123978030234 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439498556614 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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