Both government and individuals are spending too much money protecting animals and their habitat. This money should be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?

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Both government and individuals are spending too much money protecting animals and their habitat. This money should be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?

Not only governments but also citizens are allocating a huge amount of budget to prevent animals and their habit from the threat. However, it is more essential to spend money on tackling society's problems. From my perspective, I partly agree with this idea illustrated below.

There are several benefits when ensuring the safety of wildlife. Firstly, a handful number of rare animals would be on the edge of extinction; therefore, if authorities do not invest funds in constructing wildlife sanctuaries, these kinds of species are likely to no longer appear due to overfishing and poaching. Secondly, scientists may rely on animal behaviors to define the best method for preservation of the natural habitat. For example, some kinds of crocodiles have abilities to predict the unprecedented events such as earthquakes, tsunami or hail.

Apart from the statement mentioned above, the quality of human life is also especially important in social development. Firstly, living under the poverty line is a major problem in some underdeveloped countries. This is because the mortality rate is extremely alarming due to annual starvation without any financial support from local authorities. Secondly, the real shortage of healthcare services has negative impacts on citizens' health conditions. For example, the outbreak of epidemic in African countries might be the culprit of insufficient professional doctors, hospitals, and infirmaries. Therefore, spending money on these fields is fundamentally paramount.

In conclusion, in my opinion, both wildlife and human life are equally crucial in society; therefore, the national budget should be allocated proportionately to these sections.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68774703557 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14900964998 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.679841897233 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8193880926 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.785714286 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187123223262 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549581568231 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469606067777 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101429720358 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459583479275 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.58 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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