The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Today people know a lot more about other countries than they used to do. Because today we people have much more facility and also, in today’s world, things are way easier than they used to be. First of all, today people travel wherever they want with just a plane ticket and visa. Now it is so much easier because in the past travelling was not a common thing, and people used to only travel for obligation and their needs. However, now we travel to see other countries and enjoy our holidays. Travelling became an activity that people do for fun and not in order to do something necessary. If you want to travel to another country it is not a big complex like in the past, you can just buy a ticket and fly to almost anywhere and last but not least it is affordable. As a result, more and more people became available to have personal experience in other countries and learn their tradition or basically how they live. Because of that now people from different nationalities understand each other’s cultures and it helps people to get on better together also, it helps to create a mixed cultural society.
The media is another thing that made it possible to know how other people live. There is a variety in mass media. For example, there are other country’s TV shows that are available to watch from almost anywhere so that you can have an idea of their culture and tradition. ln addition you can see famous places all over the world just with a little button. Also, there are too many social media programs that allow you to see how people from other countries are spending their days, what they are up to etc. You can basically learn what they do on a daily basis and you can see pictures of the places that they are going, what they are eating which is a way to learn about different cultures. Besides, you can have international internet friends so you can learn their lives better. And probably it leads to people envy others which I think is an advantage since you can change your life and point of view in a better and positive way.
Even though there are too many good sides and advantages there are a bit of disadvantages as well. For example, it causes envy in other people’s lifestyles from different nationalities and although sometimes envy is a good thing it is not always good and it leads to complexity in your life because you should not forget your own culture while adding others. And perhaps, you might envy people who travel a lot and see other countries or rich people that you see on TV and internet, which makes you want to do the same things they do while it might not be that affordable for you.
In conclusion, I think there are both advantages and disadvantages but I would say that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because now we can understand different cultures which is the best development in the modern world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 11, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
... mixed cultural society. The media is another thing that made it possible to ...
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Line 4, column 273, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ln
...an idea of their culture and tradition. ln addition you can see famous places all ...
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Line 6, column 70, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bits'?
Suggestion: bits
...y good sides and advantages there are a bit of disadvantages as well. For example, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, well, while, another thing, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 24.0651302605 249% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 516.0 315.596192385 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57364341085 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44555522124 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420542635659 0.561755894193 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 506.74238477 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7015202591 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.380952381 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339013863925 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12620245053 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843371381098 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195270908461 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854924411494 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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