Everyone should stay at school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that all children under 18 years old should receive education at school. In my view, I believe that this idea is suitable for developing the younger generation due to some of the benefits it brings, which will be outlined in this essay.
On the one hand, there are some advantages when under 18-year-olds attend school. Firstly, most people those aged under 18 have very little real-world experience and have very little idea of what career they will pursue, and therefore staying at school they will be well educated because during this time, teachers impart broad knowledge to them, which allow them further opportunity to develop their education and time to decide upon an accordant career path. Secondly, a school is like a miniature society but safer because of teachers' support and schools' discipline. Experiencing difficulties there for 18 years, students will accumulate life experience and soft skill for their future life.
On the other hand, when students under 18 years old don't go to school will not receive legal and ethical education this can be harmful to themselves and society. For example, according to the latest statistics of the Ministry of Public Security in VietNam, the crime rate among juvenile nationwide is 5,2% with respect to people below 14 years old, 24,5% for those aged from 14 to under 16 years old and 70,3% for people aged between 16 and underneath 18 years old. Nevertheless, there are some children have an innate talent is not related to academic, so they attend proper training courses to nurture their ability and excel at it but only a small number of students.
In conclusion, based on the positive as well as negative effects presented above. I firmly assure that forcing children to stay at school until the age of eighteen will create a more educated future generation of people which may help to reduce some social and unemployment problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, in my view, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99373040752 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54451625 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573667711599 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5493815173 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.818181818 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.3636363636 7.06120827912 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15104649258 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667594104387 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564917683089 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1013955335 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298977460124 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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