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Describe a person who once apologised to you.
You should say:
• who this person was
• why he/she apologised to you
• where you were then
• Apologising is a part of good manners and I believe that it often pacifies many chaotic situations. Whenever I believe that someone owes me an apology, I do not hesitate to apologise to this person. Today, I would like to talk about one such event for this candidate task card topic.
It was around 3-4 months ago when the chief cashier of the City bank profoundly apologised to me. I cannot recall his name but my best guess would be ' Mr Johnson'. He was a middle-aged white male.
I went to the City bank branch to withdraw some money. It was unusually crowded and I had to wait in a queue for about 25 minutes.
• As soon as I presented the cheque leaf, the cashier verified my signature and checked other information on his computer system. Within a minute, he returned my cheque and informed me that my savings bank account with them did not have sufficient balance.
• His facial expression was quite rough and he advised me to check my balance before presenting any cheque leaf.
• I tried to explain to him that I deposited a large amount of money the previous day and he should check it before rejecting my cheque. He was adamant and non-cooperative.
• He asked me to contact the chief cashier for any complaint and leave the cash counter to let others do banking.
• When I explained the chief cashier the whole situation, he checked the computer system and found that my claim was absolutely correct. In fact, it was their fault that my deposit was not credited to my savings account. The chief cashier then apologised to me profoundly. He took my cheque leaf and cashed it out himself. He apologised to me several times and promised me that such an event won't happen again.
Honestly speaking, when the cashier rejected my cheque, I felt quite angry and I was beside myself with anger. I become irritated when he behaved as if I was a fool to present the cheque without having any balance!
• On the other hand, the chief cashier was quite professional and amiable. I accepted the apology and left the bank without any hard feelings.
Describe a person in the news that you want to meet
You should say:
• Who he or she is?
• What did this person show up on TV for?
• How do you know what this person?
• Why you want to meet him?
• In our day to day life we see film stars, sportsmen and politicians in the news.
• Sometimes, we are so impressed by them that we want to meet them personally.
• Here, I would like to talk about a person whom I would like to meet personally and get his autograph.
• He is my favourite Prime minister of our country sh. Narendra Modi.
• Recently, he was in almost all news Channel because he is coming to inaugurate sports complex in neighbour village for awakening people about the menace of drug addiction.
• He is coming next month to raise some money for the rehabilitation of the youth
of our country who have become drug addicts.
• I would like to meet him and get his autograph and thank him for the commendable work he is doing for the people.
• Actually Mr. Modi is my favourite political person.
• He is a multifaceted personality.
• He is a not only prime minister but also worked as Chief Minister for two times of my state.
• He had launched many beneficial policies for poor and middle class families.
• He had inaugurated many important project which are extremely useful to the communities. Because of that, he is on the top rank among the famous world best leaders.
• All my family members also love his speech because of his gregarious nature.
• When he give any speech we never miss that.
• He is an ambitious person and always works for his people.
Even a famous Producer had already made a film on their real life and struggle .
I love that movie specifically. It had already won many awards not only in Bollywood but also in Hollywood.
• It would be a dream come true for me if I get to meet him.
Describe a person who often travels by plane.
You should say:
• Who this person is
• Where they go
• Why they travel by plane
And explain how he or she feels about it.
I think most people fly only a few times a year, however there are those that need to fly more regularly, often for professional reasons.
introduction
One of my friends is a frequent flyer. He studies in New Delhi where he’s originally from, but found a well paid job in the financial sector in Ahmedabad. In order to juggle both at the same time, he needs to bounce between both cities every week.
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He has a distance learning arrangement with his university, but the university requires him to be present for a fixed number of classes. His employer is quite flexible and allows him a certain number of days off to accommodate for his studies and the extraordinary commitments he has.
Experience
When I talked to him about it, I thought he’d talk quite enthusiastically about being able to fly all the time, however quite the opposite was true. He said that while it was fun at first, he’s now exhausted and bored with having to fly so much. He said it feels so routine to him that he almost sleepwalks through it. He did say he’s managed to streamline the whole procedure, and only take carry-on luggage with him so he doesn’t have to wait around for his luggage to appear on the baggage carousel.
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I’ve hung out with him when he was booking his tickets. I’ve literally never seen someone go through the process so quickly and effortlessly. Whereas it would take most people a considerable amount of time to book their flights, he knew exactly which site to go for the best fare, and completed the process in no more than five minutes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, honestly, however, if, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, i think, in fact, you know, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 13.1623246493 289% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 10.4138276553 336% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 34.0 7.30460921844 465% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 180.0 24.0651302605 748% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 118.0 41.998997996 281% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4900.0 1615.20841683 303% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 1062.0 315.596192385 337% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61393596987 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.70861992723 4.20363070211 136% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51884836069 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 465.0 176.041082164 264% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437853107345 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1476.9 506.74238477 291% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 38.0 5.43587174349 699% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 62.0 16.0721442886 386% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6639759571 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0322580645 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1290322581 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16129032258 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 47.0 4.38176352705 1073% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 28.0 8.67935871743 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 26.0 3.4128256513 762% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 187.0 78.4519038076 238% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.