How can the government make sure that people save enough money to live on when they are old?
It seems that for most people getting older also means getting harder to earn living. In order words, many senior citizens globally, from China to the USA, are now struggling just to make enough for themselves. In order to combat this financial problem and ensure that those people could live on, various measures from governments need to be implemented. In this essay, certain solutions, which might alleviate the situation, are suggested.
First and foremost, education is of great importance. If old people are taught how to balance between their spending and their saving, a deeper understanding would be obtained. Thus, governments should open more financial management sessions for this demographic. It is likely that people will have much more control over their assessment. However, a great sum of money is needed so that those classes could be held widely.
Furthermore, an increase in job opportunities for the elderly would also be effective, since after retiring people are occasionally able to find another job, leading to income shortage. Therefore, if firms are incentivized by governments to create more employment for old workers, the issue should be partly curbed. For example, handmade craft businesses, where the tasks are not too demanding, would provide a great number of jobs for these people, if supported by the authorities. A drawback of it is that with the advancement of technology, such fields would hardly have sustainable growth.
Finally, it appears that ill-health condition, which is inevitable for old citizens, such as Alzheimer or Parkinson might be a hindrance to living without financial burdens. Therefore, better health insurance, as well as an increase in pension, maybe what people need. If a citizen is bedridden due to old age, for instance, then all of the treatments should be covered by the insurances since working for the payment is almost impossible. But this measure would increase the taxes, which they have to struggle with at young ages. That is to say, greater pressure is put on young people.
In conclusion, the solutions for this issue vary from supporting to increasing jobs, yet the most important is education. Teaching people to manage money at young ages would help them prepare better for their future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24657534247 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80068350771 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597260273973 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0796533598 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.75 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149166964816 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418189788885 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035366286054 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.083604692217 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304716123232 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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