Recently, the advertisement purposed for children are going to be massive. It is undoubtedly that advertising provide various impact to children. Hence, real effort restricting the advertisement for pupils should be taken into account.
The increasing in industrial products and trades have affected on the rise number of advertisement appear on TV. Interestingly, they set their promotion mostly for children as they love to stare at TV all day. This phenomenon will give huge impacts for the young such as vision impairment or disorders, bad words adoption, and their neurological development. Firstly, the more commercial appear on TV the more frequent children watching TV leading to the increase in eyes contact with TV's radiation. In consequence, children will suffer with eyes impairment and should wear glasses. Secondly, funny advertisement usually use easy listening words which also somehow could be impolite. As it easy to be listened, it also easy to be adopted by children in their everyday conversation. The other serious effects of TV's commercial is the disturbance in their neurological development. A research by Indonesia neurologist reported that the high frequency of children watching advertisement on TV was significantly associated with their difficulties to focus.
However, although it have a lot of effects for children, controlling television advertising seems not possible because it is belonged to the TV channel. Therefore, the best way we can do is restricting and arranging proper schedule for our children in watching TV and selecting suitable channels that meet their age. For example, we can arrange maximum an hour only for our children enjoying TV everyday and bring them to park or anyplace that can increase their physical activity. Additionally, we should accompany our children whenever they enjoy TV so that we can control and give them explanations about improper contents that advertisement could have.
In conclusion, TV commercials have many impacts to our children's healthy and development. However, we could manage time and suitable channels to minimize the effects.
- One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages 73
- The bar chart below shows different methods of waste disposal in four cities Toronto Madrid Kuala Lumpur and Amman 78
- The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007 87
- The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words 78
- Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree 67
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51840490798 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16101131724 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555214723926 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0511039882 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9444444444 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361027297401 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119688051883 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829603502913 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208794005029 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954558223875 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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