It is a good idea for people to continue working beyond retirement age. Do you agree or disagree?
Whilst some people save all their desires and plans to be done after their retirement, other people wants to continue working as a freelancer or part time employee even after their retirement. In my opinion, I believe that people who wants to carry on working even after retirement should have the opportunity to.
To begin, having an employment gives a sense of purpose in an individual’s life. People often find themselves in depression after retirement, because they lose their sense of purpose. They do not feel motivated to enjoy their life without any work. After working for 35-40 years continuously, a retirement makes them feel isolated and secluded. So, if an individual for the sake of motivation and aim, wants to keep going on in their work and want to retire at a later age, they should be allowed to do so. No one should be forced to leave work just because they reached a certain age, unless they decided on the retirement themselves.
Moreover, there are people who could not save up enough money throughout their lifetime of work for various reasons. Without any savings and backup, if they are forced to leave their work because of their retirement age, they will find themselves in an ill-fated situation. For instance, a service holder who had to spend a huge amount of resource behind the treatment of his son who suffered from a life-threatening disease will find himself with no savings when he reach the retirement age. And if he is forced out of work because of his age, he will be in a dire situation. Therefore, if someone wants to keep working due to his needs and his health allows him to, then he should be given the opportunity to continue his work.
However, I believe that sometimes, physical health does not permit a person to work beyond the retirement age. In that case, it is not a good idea for anyone to work beyond their capability. Because health always comes first. One should retire for the sake of taking care of one’s health.
To conclude, people who enjoys their work and finds a sense of purpose in their work should be given the chance to continue their work after retirement age. Also, people who find themselves in difficult situations with an insufficient saving and have the ability to continue their employment should also be allowed to do so.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... to continue working as a freelancer or part time employee even after their retirement. I...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'reaches'.
Suggestion: reaches
...ll find himself with no savings when he reach the retirement age. And if he is forced...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...anyone to work beyond their capability. Because health always comes first. One should r...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.795 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61150818494 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4625 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7833457594 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.947368421 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298451326663 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110949048669 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691805161215 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19373535766 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472772448786 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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