It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?
It is argued that it is crucial to invest government money in encouraging a healthy lifestyle instead of allocating money to the treatment of people who are already suffering from illness. In my opinion, I almost agree with this view.
Firstly, I advocate that governments should pour budget on activities and campaigns that promote how to lead a healthy lifestyle. This is because some diseases nowadays regarding people's unhealthy habits. In fact, children in western countries who have a habit of eating fast-food every day are suffering from a range of health issues like weight problems and obesity. Therefore, authorities should mobilize their residents to follow a healthy lifestyle by saying no to fast food, from that, they can avoid ailments resulting from eating such as obesity and many cardiovascular diseases. For example, the British Government recommends eating five portions of fruit and vegetable per day, this result in a fall in the rate of people with diabetes. In addition, a healthy lifestyle based on regular exercise should be advocated, this is not only improving the immune system but also preventing various inflammations and mental health problems, such as depression.
Secondly, current medical expenses are extremely expensive, so effective prevention is, in the long run, less costly than cure for both patients and the whole society. To be more specific, effective illness preclusion will reduce the number of people who visit hospitals and this will decrease the cost burden which spent to support public healthcare systems. Instead of that, the government can use that money to help poor people have a chance to approach medical treatments.
In conclusion, for the aforementioned reasons, I believe that the spending of governmental money should be centred on disease prevention by raising public awareness of regular exercise and maintaining healthy eating habits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40939597315 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85287796122 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61744966443 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3734514467 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.333333333 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22297287428 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706084275633 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557818125197 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13910611564 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416553090143 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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