Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Nowadays, children have many more opportunities to lead a healthy life than in the past because generally they live in hygienic surroundings and have a huge amount of diversity food to eat. However, modern lifestyles mean that many children spend long hours in front of the television or computers, do not take great deal of exercise and eat an unbalanced diet.
I believe that both parents and schools can do a lot to deal with this problem. Parents should limit the time that children spend watching television or playing video games and should encourage them to take more exercise. Furthermore, they can play sport with them or take them to a picnic or a camping in the weekend. Schools also should include regular exercise in their timetables, with activities such as physical education and compulsory sports.
As far as diet is concerned, parents and schools should provide children with a range of foods which contain plenty of vegetables and fruit and only a small amount of sugar or fat. If children are brought up on a healthy diet, they can have a habit of eating healthily and this, together with exercise regularly, helps them to grow into healthy adults.
On the other hand, government and health authorities have a responsibility to teach people how to create a healthy lifestyle for children. This can be done by broadcasting programmes about healthy diet on television, or by giving courses to new parents on how to bring up their children,
In conclusion, I believe that governments can encourage and help by giving information to people. However, the responsibility for bringing up children with a good healthy lifestyle depends on the people who are in regular contact with them, their parents and their teachers.
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- Topic Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem To what extent do you agree with this statement 56
- Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem To what extent do you agree with this statement 73
- Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable To what extent do you agree or disagree 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'play'
Suggestion: play
...ke more exercise. Furthermore, they can playing sport with them or take them to a picni...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...However, the responsibility for bringing up children with a good healthy lifestyl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00689655172 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80748955864 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537931034483 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.8847099637 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3636363636 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27039885655 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114071168491 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786700556247 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152509574386 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185832213383 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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