Topic Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem To what extent do you agree with this statement

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Many children these days have unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Over time, people’s lifestyle has been changing significantly, especially children and teenagers. While some children have the better lifestyle, a group of children have unhealthy lifestyle.
It is true that many children have unhealthy lifestyle? There are many things that cause distraction for children nowadays like video games, fast food, fake news…These things make children entertain and happy. For those reasons they can stay up all night to play video games, listening to music, chatting with friend so they keep losing time. Also, they rely on fast food to keep them awake. These are several reasons that children have unhealthy lifestyle.
On the other hand, are their parent are responsible for this? Parent only play one part of their lifestyle. Every mother and father wants to teach us good things. And for children, listening to that is their choice. Parents should pay more attention to their children. Whenever they realize that their kids is doing the wrong things, they need to take action and talk with them and show them what is right.
Another factor that could affect children lifestyle is their school? School is the place that educated us not only about knowledge but also lifestyle if we pay enough attention. When attending a new school, children need to follow the rules and this is the things that make children discipline and have a better lifestyle.
In conclusion, children themselves are the main person to have the control of their life. If they soon recognize the unhealthy lifestyle, they should start to build a better one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
... like video games, fast food, fake news…These things make children entertain and happ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 41.998997996 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11673151751 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48140444399 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575875486381 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2413197438 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0555555556 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2777777778 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281019462122 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100157486553 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752895875161 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151199465315 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442879118805 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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