In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.
With the better medical care in these days, we do have a greater health care to live longer. However, there are certainly some downsides of it, and I consider more about how to deal with these problems.
It is indeed that people living in the new century have a longer expectancy. Usually, we consider elderlies are the burdern of these fast-pace world, but that's is obviously incorrect. As I know, there are still some certain jobs opened for these older or retired people in Japan. They are able to work in convenient stores or resturants without getting bored. On the other hand, because they live longer, we still need their experiences and advices in order to hold some cultural activities. To me, they are always teachers whom we can learn from.
However, regarding the problems of longer life expectancy, we may not ignore about the increasing average ages. In our sociaty, it is apparently unfriendly to these older people. On one hand, they may decrease the labor force in a country. And on the other hand, people of the younger generation will have more pressure on not only raising their own kids but also taking care of their parents. In Korea, many people who are already in their 60 refuse to retire, since they suffer from getting lose income and are afraid of no one will take care of them. With these many problems, I think goverments should have effective measures to make sure elderly can be properly taken care.
In conclusion, although there are some drawbacks on the increasing life expectancy, we still cannot ignore the good influences of it. And also, I think for the better world in the future, goverments should play an improtant role on the matter.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79381443299 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43555110088 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573883161512 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5284191369 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1875 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0586099767608 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0192690725186 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252906414291 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.038755999498 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328627882379 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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