in many countries, it is illegal now to advertise alcohol. do you agree or disagree?

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in many countries, it is illegal now to advertise alcohol. do you agree or disagree?

In some nations, we could not see an alcohol advertisement, because it is illegal. In this essay, I fully disagree with this policy about alcohol advertisement, because it will generate low income for the company, and also it will reduce the number of a tax receipt for the government.
First, advertisement liquor’s company can attract people to buy it, if the government banned to advertise their products, it will make the factory’s income reduce. As a result, there will be a lot of the labor who are kicked out of the factory since they do not have enough grant to pay for the employee. So they solve their problem by issuing some of the employees to reduce their outcome. Furthermore, it will increase the number of unemployment in that country and generate a new problem for the government.
In addition, prohibiting the liquor’s factory to advertise their product is also has a negative impact on the government. The tax’s profit from the government will also experience a decline. If they prohibited it, the number of interest will go down, and the factory’s income will reduce, and the tax number that stored to the government will also reduce. So, the prosperity level of Indonesian will dwindle. So it will also occur a new problem for the government since its disadvantages.
In conclusion, prohibiting of alcohol advertisement have a lot of disadvantages for both sides, the government and the factory. So the government should rebuild the policy and regulation about prohibiting the advertisement of alcohol in every public’s media.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15953307393 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19335560547 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490272373541 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8123744761 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.084689503409 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358481172382 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036749016736 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.067300251056 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390081148847 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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