In some countries, specifically developed countries, many married couples decide to only raise up to two children or choose to not have them at all, as it needs much more money to raise children for their food, school, clothes, insurance and many other considerations. Therefore, nowadays the number of young people is decreasing. However, life expectancy to elderly is raising. Consequently, it is projected that the number of populations in the future will be much dominated by old people. This situation can be either a positive or negative development, but in my opinion the negative outweighs the positive.
Having a longer life expectancy is an evidence to a health conscious society where people live a stress-free life along with making helathy lifestyle choises such as consuming food with amazing nutrients and working out every day for half an hour minimum. In addition, longer life expectancy may also mean a fully functioning healthcare system where people receive immediate treatments for any choronic or terminal diseases, so that, the mortality rate is suppressed in the country. From this development, it can be seen that the government is proven to be successful in improving the health service system in their countries.
However, I would predict that the longer life expectancy can be a massive drawback to the society. The higher number of the older pepulation means the higher number of unemployment due to massive number of retirements. In that case, the government would be forced to allocate much higher expenditures in retirement funds which may cause budget cuts for other developmental costs. This would defenitely slow down the economy of country. Furtheremore, smaller number of younger population would lead to smaller number of productive groups of citizens. For intance, the manufacturing industries would be short-staffed of younger workers and lead to slow manufacturing rate. This situation would very much cripple the companies to be productive which would lead to inabilities for them to make profits. More and more companies, would eventually file for bankcruptcy and nationwide economic catastrophe would knock on the door. The company eventually would not have a positive outlook in the socioeconomic for present year and years after.
In conclusion, although higher number of older population could mean a couple positive progresses, it would also mean slowing down major sectors for the sustainability of the countries. This situation can lead to an economy collapse which have impact to massive populations.
- The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures and make comparisons where relevant
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2157.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40601503759 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03348440336 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521303258145 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8428571248 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.833333333 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158293742658 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549995062897 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048094057131 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107131943787 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781292105351 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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