Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the fast-growing speed of urban development nowadays, many big cities are unable to provide sufficient land for constructing new buildings. Therefore, some local authorities believe that this problem can be solved by reducing park land. While this solution does bring about some benefits for the city's development, I completely disagree with it.
On the one hand, using park land have some advantages as it will create more space for residental areas and many useful buildings such as shopping malls, hotels and restaurants. This, in turn, will benefits the citizens and contribute to the economy. In addition, city governments will not need to spend money employing workers to do works that help maintaining the park such as mowing the lawn or irrigating trees. Instead, this money can be used to invest in essential sectors such as healthcare, transport and education.
On the other hand, cutting off park land can create more problems for the city. Firstly, in a hectic and overcrowded city, park is often seen as the only place that could provide a green and tranquil environment for people to relax. If this green area disappeared it would be extremely difficult for people to find a healthy place to relax and they will have more risk of getting mental health problems such as stress or anxiety. Secondly, park is an ideal place where children can meet and play together. Therefore, when children lost this playground they will likely to just stay at home playing video games or watching TV. As a result, they will become more lethargic and have many health problems such as obesity and myopia.
In conclusion, although using land park to create more buildings benefits the city to some extent, I strongly believe that park should be maintained in order to provide a green environment for residents and protect their health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...ls and restaurants. This, in turn, will benefits the citizens and contribute to the econ...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to maintain' or 'maintain'.
Suggestion: to maintain; maintain
...employing workers to do works that help maintaining the park such as mowing the lawn or irr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05573770492 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62957360615 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577049180328 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3441540245 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.142857143 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404357959309 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139214041286 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962649022518 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270585141123 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075293955539 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.