Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the fast-growing speed of urban development nowadays, many big cities are unable to provide sufficient land for constructing new buildings. Therefore, some local authorities believe that this problem can be solved by reducing park land. While this solution does bring about some benefits for the city's development, I completely disagree with it because it will create more problems than it solves.
First, in a hectic and overcrowded city, park is often seen as the only place that could provide a green and tranquil environment for people to relax. If this green area disappeared it would be extremely difficult for people to find a healthy place to relax and they will have more risk of getting mental health problems such as stress or anxiety. Take Ha Noi, a metropolis in Vietnam for example. While its Air Quality Index is now at record levels, people living there cannot find any green place to rest because almost all of the areas in the city have been occupied by large commercial buildings. Consequently, many residents had suffered from respiratory diseases and they have to move to rural areas in order to find a fresher environment.
Second, a park is an ideal place where children can meet and play together. Therefore, when this playground is lost, children who are not so devoted to sports and other physical activities will be discouraged to find alternative places to play. Instead, they will likely to just do other kinds of entertainments at home, namely playing video games or watching TV. As a result, they will become more lethargic and have many health problems such as obesity and myopia.
In conclusion, although using land park to create more buildings benefits the city to some extent, I strongly believe that park should be maintained in order to provide a green environment for residents and protect their health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... any green place to rest because almost all of the areas in the city have been occupied by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02922077922 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70219414167 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597402597403 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9221879736 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.153846154 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353549856059 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121535208765 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988938094459 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227728670201 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121619557714 0.056905535591 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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