Many young people today know more about international pop and movie stars than
about famous people in the history in their country. Why is this? What can be done to
increase young people’s interest in famous people in the history of their country?
In contemporary time, it is undeniable fact that celebrities have represented for younger generation not only depend on their glamorous but also inspire a few lines of text. However, for those who opponents argue that why young people are prone to idolize the social networking phenomenon rather than famous historical figures of their nations. From my perspective, there are several reasons for critical and solution will be discuss in this essay.
On the one hand, it is noteworthy that state-of-the-art of social media has ceased us flooded with information. Firstly, the ubiquitous appearance of pop stars showing their melodious vocal performances with mesmerizing dances or hero catchy images in blockbusters is a part of appealing to audiences that following for celebrity’s footsteps. A typical example, BTS is known as KPOP superstar with million of fans all around the world due to handsome and up-to-date fashion. In contrast, historical subject seems to a test-based in the education system in most of the countries. That is reason why student tend to bored with approaching to historical documents as same as hardly when shaping in their head about forefather victories.
On the other hand, it is notwithstanding the aforementioned that government could change the trite subject of history to more interest through the modern education methods. One of the solution should be begun from parents who have to responsible for stimulating to learn history characters for their children as opening TV channels like history channel which run throughout the day, giving information about famous people and events from history. Moreover, the schools could incorporate technology in teaching methods, like the use of audio-visual aids to pay attention for student. Finally, the authorities should invest to museums and famous historical places which encourage children to visit them by highly subsidizing tickets for the students.
In conclusion, although we could not overshadow the influence of celebrities to young people, changing the teaching method in historical subject would a promising resolution in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, moreover, so, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50759878419 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06053219076 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629179331307 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.633835123 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.384615385 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205877412626 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585252090355 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068140178225 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106435703415 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590401019957 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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