Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children What are its causes and what solutions can be offered

Essay topics:

Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?

It is argued that more and more children are getting obesity which was meant for adults only. The reason of it is because fast food restaurants have gained much popularity in recent years, and the most viable solution is raising the awareness of people about fast food consumption.

It cannot be denied that fast food restaurants or franchises are becoming more and more popular. The fact is that junk food is cheap and convenient enough for young kids to buy with their allowance every day. Therefore, they are likely to take in a lot of fat and calories, resulting in putting on much weight. One survey in Canada revealed that the number of young people getting obesity had increased by 40% in 2019 because most of those kids buy fast food for lunch on a daily basis.

The best solution is to educate both parents and kids about the danger of over-eating fast food. If young kids are taught about it, they will be more aware and consume junk food more sparingly. Besides, parents themselves will pay more attention to their kids’ meals and prepare healthier food as a result. In Vietnam, since 2019, before a new school year, students and their parents have been invited to take part in a health seminar and have been educated about healthy eating in which fast food should be consumed in moderation. The seminar has proved to be effective as less kids were reported to be overweight in 2019 compared to 2017 and 2018.

In conclusion, due to the development of fast food industry, more modern kids are getting obesity, and the government should educate people on how to consume fast food appropriately to address this issue.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...meant for adults only. The reason of it is because fast food restaurants have gained much ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun kids is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e seminar has proved to be effective as less kids were reported to be overweight in ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7676056338 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43693517456 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528169014085 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.374382296 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.833333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0975608262052 0.244688304435 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455285857002 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468475737557 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0639683543703 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336053241442 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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