More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people think a solution can be to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it is observed that individuals are more likely to be susceptible to obesity. Therefore, a school of thought holds that this issue could be addressed by increasing the price of junk foods. Although I partly agree with this notion, I would align myself with the opinion that it is ideal for other approaches such as erecting more sports facilities and instilling the side effects of consuming fatty foods to people to be applied.
On the one hand, it cannot be denied that the former measure would be auspicious in some facets. Firstly, the exorbitant price of junk foods can hinder many individuals from purchasing them in light of the fact that they do not want to lavish money on these foods. As a result, people are inclined to eschew fattening foods in favor of other healthy types like noodles or rice, which could render them less vulnerable to being overweight. Furthermore, should individuals no longer have preference for these detrimental foods, retailers tend to cut down the sales of these cuisines. For example, in Hanoi, the price of junk foods is quite stratospheric, which makes local sellers to opt for other healthy foods to sell . Thereby, people are unable to buy these fattening foods.
On the other hand, there are some viable methods that can curb the obesity among individuals. The first approach is that authorities need to allocate their budgets to constructing more sports amenities to incentivize their citizens to do exercise. More specifically, obviously, not only can working out help individuals to lose their weight but also assist them in enhancing their well-being. Hence, the rate of obese people in many nations would decline substantially. Moreover, governments also ought to promulgate the deleterious influences of consuming junk foods excessively to individuals. This could be perfectly exemplified by the fact that in Vietnam, the authorities have initiated some campaigns which could help inhabitants to cultivate the injurious impacts of eating these foods. Thus, people tend to reduce the amount of junk foods consumed.
In conclusion, explicitly, it is indisputable that increasing the price of fatty foods would have some benefits in terms of reducing the likelihood of being obese among people; nevertheless, I want to affirm that other measures need to be taken into account to yield the best outcomes. In addition, if these approaches are combined together, there will be a tremendous stride in improving the overall health of humans.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 717, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s to opt for other healthy foods to sell . Thereby, people are unable to buy these...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20099255583 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85133044135 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535980148883 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.382096021 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.444444444 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275560552258 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835744350397 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405156361857 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166154531493 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347170215053 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 717, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s to opt for other healthy foods to sell . Thereby, people are unable to buy these...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20099255583 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85133044135 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535980148883 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.382096021 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.444444444 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275560552258 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835744350397 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405156361857 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166154531493 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347170215053 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.