People are responsible for their happiness. Others feel happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
Nowadays, there is an ongoing debate about whether individuals ought to bear onus in being joyful. Although some experts acknowledge that people are accountable for their happiness, I would align myself with the opinion that other factors in life might serve such a fundamental role in making them feel delighted.
On the one hand, a vast array of reasons has prevailed some individuals on supporting the former opinion. Firstly, if people are willing to allocate their time for recreation, they might experience a better emotion. This is because entertainment has been proved to not only help humans escape from the hustles and bustles of their life but also assist them in improving their mental health. Accordingly, their brains may secrete substances which are useful in lifting up people’s mood after they are occupied with a large amount of workload. Furthermore, those who are prone to be optimistic in real-life events and difficulties would perceive happiness. This can be perfectly exemplified by a fact that Nick Vujic , a reputable inspirer, always feels positive when facing arduous tasks in his occupation and devotes endeavors to overcoming all of them. As a result, he would be successful, which helps him have a happy life.
On the other hand, there are a host of justifications convincing me to concede that the feeling of joy would rely on some factors in people’s life. The first reason stems from the fact that relationships with other individuals may contribute to the happiness that a person experiences. For instance, many studies have revealed that students getting along well with their teachers are capable of feeling delighted. Hence, they could hold favorable attitudes towards learning, which stimulates their eagerness of studying and encourages them to be industrious . Moreover, professions and incomes would be very vital in terms of affecting the happiness mood of individuals owing to the fact that these factors help them to be sufficient in money to make ends meet. To illustrate, a great number of Vietnamese inhabitants , especially those are employed for high-paid jobs, tend to have satisfaction with their life. Therefore, they could perceive happiness, which could diminish the risks of enduring from psychological illnesses like stress or depression.
In conclusion, explicitly, it is indisputable that individuals had better to be responsible for happiness; nevertheless, I want to affirm that other factors that this emotion depends on should be taken into account. Apart from that, I may opine that it is much better for people to attain what they desire in order to be happy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 420.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26904761905 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9260760771 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590476190476 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6719790094 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.944444444 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2777777778 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286846939907 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865367776814 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626950748274 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182165417058 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334268543851 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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