Multi-cultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic people, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree?
In this time, there are some people who opine that cultural diversity in a country is more beneficial for itself, rather than being problematic. In my opinion, I totally agree with this viewpoint and will present my reasons in this essay.
To commence with, the combination of distinct cultures in a country helps increase its national revenue from tourism. It is because the idea of experiencing a variety of traditions, cuisines with different flavors and costumes with different colors in a country is appealing and interesting to anyone. For example, travellers would love to come to the USA as they can enjoy various kinds of food ranging from Western to Eastern and different lifestyles of people living there, which is a rewarding experience. As a result, more foreign tourists will be attracted to visit this country, which in turn, creates more job opportunities for the citizens and thus, increasing the country’s income.
In addition, thanks to the harmony of cultures in a country, a talent pool may be built which helps foster the country’s improvement. It is true that people from different cultural backgrounds have different abilities, strengths and weaknesses. Therefore, when they are combined in a mutual working place, they are able to devote their talents to their companies by coming up with unique and break-ground ideas. For example, people from Asian countries may often perform better at Mathematics, while those from European ones may often be superior in engineering skills. Once they collaborate, the combination of their knowledge and skills will make progress to their entrepreneur, which entails a faster and more sustainable growth of the country where they live.
To conclude, I strongly believe that cosmopolitan societies can provide a country with various advantages including increasing tourism revenue and the gathering of talented individuals, which all contribute to a more potential prosperity of that country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37012987013 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95832496948 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577922077922 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6994152008 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.833333333 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212179827197 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830469749198 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447602746389 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129701974816 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200328668727 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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