As a result of electronic inventions such as computer and television, people do less physical activities and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
It is no-doubt true that the inventions of electronic devices have affected our everyday lives so much throughout history. While this might harm people’s physical health to some extent, I believe that the advantages do outweigh the disadvantages.
The main drawback of electronic tools is that people become less physically active due to excessive time spent for such inventions. In the workplace, employees are expected to sit down and work almost without breaks in front of the computer’s screen over a long period of time. This repeated action on a daily basis can progressively lead to impaired physical mobility or dangerously increased chance of fatal diseases such as diabetes or stroke. A report in the UK in 2017, for example, pointed that millions of adults in their country were physically inactive, putting themselves at greater risk of heart and circulatory disease. This can also be a negative impact for the whole community in the long term, as we will possibly see an increasing number of patients in hospitals suffering from these poor health conditions.
Despite the negatives mentioned above, it is my belief that these inventions are bringing us more merits than demerits. Firstly, they allow an individual to communicate and keep in touch with his family, relatives and friends, thus reinforce the relationship among them. Secondly, people can be informed about what is happening around the globe, especially those living in remote areas like islands or deserts, simply by turning on a television. For instance, if a man chose to live in an absolutely isolated countryside, his life would be in huge trouble and tedious as a consequence of the absence of such electronic devices. Furthermore, inventions like the computer offer a great opportunity for many young students to complete lots of online University courses with no need of attending face-to-face classes.
In conclusion, although I recognize some potential dangers of electronically operated devices, it appears that these inventions are more beneficial to human being in terms of communication and long distance study
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...nt of the computer’s screen over a long period of time. This repeated action on a daily basis ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32934131737 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99262842284 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.679640718563 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.1161721263 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 136.923076923 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240824280369 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729124265524 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616866468959 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131798886693 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727202870853 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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