Multi-cultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic people, bring more benfits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There exists an opinion that cosmopolitan societies are better for the development of a country despite some of their disadvantages. From my personal perspective, I am strongly in favor of this idea for several reasons.
Apparently, a multi-cultural society can bring a wide variety of benefits to the nation in terms of economic development.To begin with, the immigration of people from all over the results in the emergence of a mixture of different cultures. The majority of immigrants are high achievers, such as successful businessmen, people doing intellectual jobs or well-trained students learning abroad. Their arrival not only upgrades the standard of living for the whole community but it also contributes to the national budget because of the taxes. Moreover, they become one of the most vital work force due to their precious experience and investments. This leads to the dramatic development of the economy of the country they immigrate.
In addition, the advantage of a cosmopolitan society can be recognized in the aspect of social. It is undeniable that citizens gain more opportunities to be exposed to distinct culture from all over the world. The practical knowledge took in daily life, for example, about foreign languages or other countries’ traditions, seem to be more useful than the theoretical ones. People, especially children can enrich their global understanding by communicating or cooperating with other from different nations. Hence, they tend to be more open-minded and tolerant of non-indigenous customs.
However, multi-cultural societies have some problems. Some immigrants are found out to be hard to accept the changes in ethnic cultures. They try to maintain their own distinctive characteristics. This can cause some conflicts between the native and people from oversea due to the total different attitudes in some matters.
In conclusion, I believe that the benefits of a multi-cultural society such as economic development or the exposure to cultural diversity outweigh its drawbacks. These disadvantages can be solved with easily over the time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50464396285 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26828543044 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.872878563 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7777777778 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9444444444 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193071041707 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541847199433 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051888457098 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993399325121 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308945194805 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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