Now a days celebrities are more famous for their glamour and their wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to young people, To what extent do you agree or disagree.
In the world of opportunities, many people chase their aspirations and someday they wins to become an achiever in the field they choose. In recent times there are certainly increased number of achievers in various fields like sports, music, dance, arts and education. A group of people thinks that celebrities are popular for their charm and their prosperity whereas others portrays that they are well known only by the rewards and laurels achieved in their areas of expertise. I agree to the ones who claims on achievements rather than money and beauty.
Besides various levels of competition among others, very few popular faces show up in the ladder, this makes clear that they overtake the hurdles and sacrificed their time and effort to achieve to this point. Firstly, people who cultivates the habit of hard work and doing things they want with dedication, it is clear that they can easily achieve anything, for example, well known cricketers were praised for their victory in the playground but no one realizes the hard work the cricketer had put on in practicing before the match. Secondly, these achievers would not stop their learning when they reach up to a certain level, whereas they keep practicing on a regular basis and constantly updating the necessary skills to sustain in their relevant field.
On the contrary, many people got attracted to their favorite star for their physical attire and following them as role models rather than noticing their hard work and efforts to reach this level. For instance, many young children are fond of their ideal cinema stars and ought to copy their styles and behaviors rather than other good things present in those actors. Moreover, the other important aspect of following these popular figures was their wealth, nevertheless, the young minds in our society were mislead-ed with the approach of money, all famous stars earn their money from their hard work and compassion and people should change their mindset from looking into this perspective.
To conclude, It is not only the outfits these celebrities wear, how gorgeous they look and however wealthy they are, it is actually the achievements and rewards which makes them popular. Younger children ought to rethink about looking on their star's success stories rather than their external appearance and their luxury.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'win'
Suggestion: win
...hase their aspirations and someday they wins to become an achiever in the field they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13910761155 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43174967739 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564304461942 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.7991584225 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.166666667 106.682146367 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.75 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356792847874 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148535185667 0.084324248473 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078756668832 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231999715151 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582196133582 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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