: Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some evidence supposed that the media and entertainment are simply publishing the eye-catching and stunning events which are outstanding the glamour of celebrity or other public figures on the red carpet. While others pointed out that these groups are transferred the wrong messages to most young generations currently. Looking from an overall perspective, which is extremely bothering in affecting to younger lifestyle and made up the harms that could not be sought.
First of all, what certainly is that idols have significantly attracted to publicity, that is prominent people that be those are war heroes, a talented artist or scientist that are shown on the diligent and succeed in their pathway. Nevertheless, this ignored valuable messages that are worthy taken into consideration and spreading out to ordinary people. It meant that the young generation who are impressed by excessive displayed, that such as property they possess, becoming wealthy that need to just be known into the eye-sight others. So as it leads to young people imitate unconsciously that not depth-origins of the way reaching as a celebrity.
Another primary problem that leading most young people could not comprehend such of obstacles that famous people are facing on the pathway to fame. Indeed, the young generation who are controlled by the fascination that their idols made. That could be mentioned as standards moral or luxurious living impracticable. This may put them in debt to completing their demands and unintentionally causing social problems.
In conclusion, celebrities played a key role in the eye of publicity, every moment will be caught up, in which, people life may be affected by immoral with anything else are causing from the act of famous people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...other public figures on the red carpet. While others pointed out that these groups ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30107526882 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92978690166 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609318996416 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.632188816 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.25 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0851166211112 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306847698486 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316453470773 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0509317456245 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234622662527 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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