Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, many celebrities are synonymous with their glamorous and luxury lifestyle rather than their talent. Althought it's true that there are negative impact on young people, I believe that positive influences outweight negative ones. On the one hand, many well-known people achieve fame without working. They attend parties, clubs, appear in grossip magazines. They don't have masterpiece of work, abilities in their carrier, however, they are still famous, because they beautiful, glamourous and rich. This may make young people copy their lifestyle and the message to young people is that success can be achieved easily, and that school work is not necessary. On the other hand, many celebrities gain popularity by their incredible act and dramatic performance. They work hard, always improve themselves and as a result, public have recorgnised them for their masterpiece of arts and great achievements. They may face more difficulties in the starting point, however, with patience, they become success which inspire youngsters a lot. Teenagers can be motivated and encouraged to try them best. One of the examples would be the legendary English footballer David Beckham. He was not only a good athlete but also became the model of some sports apparels. Although David Beckham sometimes had shown his glamorous lifestyle, but he had also shown to the public that he was a good football player. He had informed in his biography that to achieved success, he had to work hard in his young age, as he had to practice in doing penalty kick for around 1000 kick per day consistently. These kinds of celebrities are worth to be followed by the young generation. In conclusion, although some famous people are well known for their wealth and luxurious style, instead of their achievement and it would be a negative example for the young age people. However I think that there are many celebrities who are really talented and hard-working, they are worth for young generation to follow.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ative example for the young age people. However I think that there are many celebrities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, well, i think, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15527950311 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72453541817 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568322981366 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9956745066 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6470588235 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9411764706 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224879544808 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671903171557 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755765707636 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224879544808 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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