Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
With the development of the society, people’s values are also changing. Nowadays celebrities’ behaviors are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and I think this may set a bed example to young people.
For young people who love fashion so much but are very shortsighted, they are easily attracted by gorgeous appearance. It means that many young people might be influenced by the celebrities who are famous for outside and don’t have many achievements.
In my opinion, we should measure a people’s value by the contribution he makes to the society or to someone else, rather than how glamorous they look and how wealth they are. Some celebrities try their best to get fame by packing themselves which
will set a bed example for young people.
On the contrary, those celebrities who are passed on word of mouth all achieve extraordinary achievements through their own hard work and finally learned by future generations.It is true that young people are the hope for the future of the country, every one in the society have an opportunity to protect their mind and values. Thus both celebrities and other famous people should warn their own behaviors in public.So that young people can get a good environment to grow.
Overall, on the one hand, the celebrities should watch their behaviors in some ways, they also should try to get a achievement to improve themselves. On the other hand, young people are ought to establish the correct value to judge other.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, look, may, so, thus, i think, in my opinion, it is true, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1252.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98804780876 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8173669528 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549800796813 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8075594525 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.2 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512309959332 0.244688304435 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196738962329 0.084324248473 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177597494935 0.0667982634062 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270264426259 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167490056472 0.056905535591 294% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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