Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is believed that teenagers these days got a bad impact from big names who are become well-known for their glamour and wealth than for their success. From my perspective of view, two main reasons make me agree with this statement.
Firstly, with the rise of social media, it provides us many ways to become famous. For that reason, a large number of people who have good appearance and financial status can become widely recognized on the Internet without any talents. Their fans including youngsters will always consider their idols' glamour and wealth as their own goals in life because they are too young to have their right thoughts. Consequently, they just follow after those celebrities even though these things are not suitable for their range of age. For example, a wide recognized tiktoker named Dat Villa got a large amount of money donated from his fans who are just children.
Secondly, all those celebrities got their fame because of their rich and they have the ability to earn money themselves. Young individuals who are their fans want to be like them but they have no wealth and that will lead to bad actions. Daily news shows that detrimental effects from renowned people cause children to do negative things such as stealing from their parents, cheating on other friends, and so on.
All things considered, celebrities now with their glamourous appearance and strong financial background can become famous but not everyone can afford that, especially youngsters, Therefore, celebrities should pay attention to their behaviors and actions when they appear on social media so that they can not only guide the young generations towards positive things but also become a good role model for them to follow.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 100, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ways to become famous. For that reason, a large number of people who have good appearance and fin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04195804196 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49330856658 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597902097902 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.083919415 49.4020404114 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.090909091 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325005499763 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122860195974 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623172585912 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210415328866 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617018953638 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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