Nowadays a large amount of advertising aimed at children should be banned because of the negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people discuss companies that using commercials for children should be prohibited by the governments because it has several negative impacts on children. In my opinion, I believe it should not be completely banned.
First of all, there are several suitable reasons why advertising aim on children has some disadvantages. Many children are being attracted to what they see in advertisements easily because these advertisements are very colorful and interesting. Therefore, the relationship between parents and their children can be torn apart. For example, many toys companies have used advertisements to attract customers to buy their products which most aim at children so those kids begin to beg their mom or dad to buy them. If they deny, kids might have some rude behaviors with their parents. Moreover, children's cognitive still limited so they are hard to understand the problems deeply and clearly. For instance, numerous fast food and junk food companies these days use commercials to target children who are keen on eating sweats as their marketing strategies. Unfortunately, most children do not understand the meaning of these ads, and easy to purchase these unhealthy foods. As a result, many bad consequences have been made that affected their's health such as obesity and diabetes.
ON the other hand, I feel that there should not be a ban on advertising aimed at children because advertising is one of the key aspects of a prosperous economy. If bans were to be placed on commercials, many companies would suffer from financial weights. For example, Coca-Cola gives jobs to many people around the world, and if governments banned advertising, the company shall witness a huge chance that will decrease in sales and profits. Besides, they must have changed their strategies which can cut off a large number of workers as necessary. This causes the rate of unemployment which rises rapidly
In conclusion, advertisements that aim at children may have certain negative impacts on lots of households, but it is unreasonable to prohibit it and the government can allow some rules to solve this issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21700879765 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94884330743 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589442815249 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0764974695 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.1875 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269092242512 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918800031177 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830288738703 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176333930075 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265396956709 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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