Decisions in life are imperative for future goals. In this light, some individuals tend to move away from their family members, choosing to be accompanied by their peers or just be themselves, thereby negatively affecting the society in their hometown. In the writer's view, although it could be true in some ways, there are more plausible reasons to partially disagree.
Apparently, the rise in the population of people leaving their place of birth is unstoppable. One reason for this is the occurence of brain-drain, whereby professionals are deciding to look for a greener pasture in other regions or continents. Unfortunately, their place of origin suffers because of lack of skilled and knowledgeable individuals to propel the progress in their society. To exemplify, Philippines has a lot of skilled and professional workers, such as nurses, engineers and heavy equipment operators that seek better oppurtunity overseas, thereby shortages in these professions lead to poor services to the citizenry. Another factor is education. Younger generations tend to strengthen their foundations in learning in some well-known schools, hence moving away from their family is necessary for them to ensure a brighter future by finishing a degree. Sadly, small colleges in urban places are neclected, hence eventually closure of these schools is inevitable. As these schools declares bankcruptcy, employees lost their job causing a dilemma for their family, and at the same time for those students who cannot afford out of town unibersity study. Therefore, it is quite acceptable that to live away and leave the community behind could lead to dire consequences.
However, given the above statements, there are stronger views to fully support the positivity of being away with family. An individual leaving its comfort zone will initially encounter some difficulties, such as emotional and financial support. But as time pass by, gradually the ability to adapt and overcome these situations is beneficial to hone an individual's perspective to persevere in its endeavors. In the long run, by having a better quality of living, a person can now return the favor to his family and community by sending back its self-earned money. As an exemplification, again in the Philippines, overseas Filipino workers are the ones who greatly contribute to the progress of their economy by the influx of foreign currency entering the country. Furthermore, after being away with the community, some decide to go back to their hometowns to serve their family and community, by sharing ideas and skills, and at the same time to be employed in that place. Also, government tries to intervene by shouldering tuitions in the form of scholarship grants of some dedicated students to attend in prestigious academy, but in return graduates need to render their service back to the community. Nonetheless, it is undoubtedly beneficial for people to be separated in their place of origin due to these reasons.
To sum up, even though there could be personal and social drawbacks of leaving away from family. Practically, people nowadays have no choice but to adapt in any situations to broaden their knowledge and way of life, which in the long run it will positively affect their families and the society.
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- It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? 72
- Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects, Others think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Techonology are more important than History.Disscuss both these view and give your own opinion 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 41.998997996 214% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2759.0 1615.20841683 171% => OK
No of words: 523.0 315.596192385 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27533460803 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97847164745 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 176.041082164 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550669216061 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 886.5 506.74238477 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9565947487 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.409090909 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7727272727 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121406805299 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327651027374 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329132930093 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786354578388 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114620586542 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 78.4519038076 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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