Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

it is supposed that lately the youngs allocate their spare time inproperly in shopping centres and it simultaneously has bad influence on both of them and the society they currently reside in. Personally , I throughly agree with this viewpoint for a number of reasons that I will outline below

On the one hand , sparing a plethora of free time on buying in malls precisely make negative results. Firstly, it perhaps provoke a waste of time in others affairs in order to make more money or obtain more opportunities towards promoting in business . Moreover , it will reckon young people’s budgets increasingly limited and it leads to the shortage of savings which will be vital for upcoming life of them. In addition , this dangerous habit extremely become more staple in society and readily attract other people imitate and take mistaken actions which tackle a variety of issues in both the ideology of every citizens and economic development.

On the other hand , besides spending spare time on shopping is harmful to every young people , there are a lot of popular causes which also tribute to have a formatation to negative consequences . The young who incredebly focus on shopping malls are less mindful of playing sporting activities than ordinary people . Its context is as hazardous as suffering from diseases because they will not usually sustain their quality of general health conditions and therefore the risk of chronic diseases like headache pain or cancer is more , leads to awkward circumstances that noone want to deal with .

In conclusion, I hope parents need to spend more time teaching their offsprings seriously about how importance of spending free time is, and avoiding the pitfalls of a consumeristic lifestyle.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1456.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18149466192 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8214086354 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626334519573 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.7092113579 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.777777778 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2222222222 20.7667163134 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2222222222 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2709914843 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106434337715 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600807033749 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15312494367 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358872278186 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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