The older people who need employment have to compete with younger ones. What problems can this create? What are some solutions?
It is believed that there is fierce competition between the older people and younger ones for a vacancy in occupations. In my perspective, I reckon that its consequences could be accounted for the crime, and the government should provide some vocational institutions for the elderly to tackle it.
Admittedly, there are several issues that this tendency could trigger in terms of individuals and societies. Firstly, it causes the rise level of crime. In fact, the job seekers are required qualifications and knowledge in advanced technology for occupations the young group have more advantages due to their capability to learn and adapt quickly. For instance, the old people usually get used to the obsolete Microsoft office version, and if it was updated, it would be difficult for them to have an adoption than youngsters, so they may easily be fired, improving the percentage of unemployment. Thus, to earn a living when becoming unemployed, they usually commit the crime such as drug dealers and thieves as being a criminal is likely to be the optimal solution to maintain their survival in life.
Hence, the government should implement some measures to curb this detrimental tendency. The first and foremost solution for it is that the vocational institutions play an essential role. As a matter of the fact, older people usually lack of qualifications and knowledge in a particular job, so these institutes contribute a huge opportunity to narrow the gap between these two groups since it facilitates them to have a good grasp of advanced technology and put the knowledge gained into the real-life, improving the ability to compete with the youngsters. For instance, in Vietnam, there are some free courses provided by the government targeting the elderly in terms of skills and education improvement to better the level of skills. As the result, they may feel more confident in competitions with equal chances due to having outstanding workmanship
In conclusion, the older employees have been in intense competition with younger ones nowadays. This can cause the rise level of crime and the role of vocational institutes is inevitable to urgently tackle it
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, thus, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98425254717 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.97243006 49.4020404114 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9230769231 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173810374861 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599708817169 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501951801976 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122555725951 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520335122386 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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