One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
These days medical care is getting better due to advanced technology. Scientists are discovering more and more combinations that can cure diseases and some that help people live longer. While a lot of people consider living longer a good thing, I believe that both the advantages and disadvantages should be weighed.
Initially, the advantages of longer lives are that families can spend more time with each other. It was possible centuries back due to healthier lifestyles. there were 3 or 4 generations that were alive at once, but now we would be even lucky to have 3 generations alive at all. Studies have shown that life expectancy is dropping and is estimated to be around 65 for the new generation unless they live an overly healthy life, but thanks to the better health care, the expectancy can be increased. Likewise, being able to live longer also means that people can finally do what they want to do. people go through their whole lives trying to make a living, thus they never had enough time to do what they wished. Now with longer lives, they can change that. Another advantage is that you get to experience more changes that happen throughout your whole life. For example, a person who lived for 80 years would have experienced more changes than those who lived for 70 years.
However, some disadvantages need to be considered. Society is filled with good and bad people. This means that bad people can also get longer lives by seeking the necessary health care. A good person who increases his life would help others to live longer. In contrast, a bad person would harm and do stuff to others, consequently shortening their lives. We have hunger or a type of greed in us, meaning we would not stop at trying to make people live longer. Scientists would investigate in ways to become an immortal thus resulting in experimenting on people and corruption. People would desperately try to hold onto others because of over-attachment.
Given the above, it may seem as advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Yet, I believe that the disadvantages will have a far greater effect on society. We should learn to let people go and let nature take its course. The thirst for greed should not be satisfied.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...uries back due to healthier lifestyles. there were 3 or 4 generations that were alive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, likewise, may, so, thus, while, for example, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6795315256 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547368421053 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2547536117 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307689735164 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800723693828 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590900678727 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178129937998 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539472975804 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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