Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Faced with the potential consequences from the heavy
school workload, some parents suggest reducing their
children’s pressure by getting their children to
participate in more physical activities. From my
perspective, however, I partially agree with this view.
On the one hand, it is noteworthy that encouraging
children to exercise leads to many physical benefits.
Scientific studies have shown that although it is
invisible, devoting to education for academic
achievements during juvenile stage is at the expense of
normal physical growth due to the lack of time for
outdoor activities. Therefore, it will be a mistake to
overlook the fact that children who give high
commitment of time to education are inclined to adopt
sedentary lifestyle, which in turn may cause health
problems, typically obesity and nearsightedness. This
example is the illustration of the fact that if children
spend more time exercising and participating in physical
activities moderately, they can protect themselves from
common health problems resulted from inactivity.
On the other hand, students need to spend time on
study for the highly competitive pressure of education.
According to sociological researches, the labor-
intensive economy has gradually developed to
knowledge-based economy, graduates from prestigious
schools with outstanding academic qualifications are
sought-after by employers and head-hunters, especially
in fields with high level of specialization. In fact, the
evaluation for university admission is largely based on
academic performance as the prerequisite, and in most
cases admission committees give little weight to
student’s performances in sports. Therefore, spending
more time on studies rather than sports is more
recommended for most children.
In conclusion, there are many merits of doing physical
activities, but for children, these benefits should not
impact on their regular academic schooling.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Knowledge-based
...e economy has gradually developed to knowledge-based economy, graduates from prestigious sc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.11785714286 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28546388797 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632142857143 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4602125904 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.727272727 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 37.0 4.38176352705 844% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271628199218 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102691542755 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712305128138 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0525841477639 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684065932754 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.51 12.4159519038 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Knowledge-based
...e economy has gradually developed to knowledge-based economy, graduates from prestigious sc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.11785714286 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28546388797 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632142857143 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.4602125904 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.727272727 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 37.0 4.38176352705 844% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271628199218 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102691542755 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712305128138 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0525841477639 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684065932754 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.51 12.4159519038 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.