Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that whether children should be motivated by their fathers and mothers, to get involved in more exercise in order to improve their physique. In my opinion, it would bring many merits for kids if they can practice exercises more.

The first benefit of doing physical activities is that it would reduce the risks associated with children's general health when they are learning. This is because the nature of studying demands young students to sit and maintain their stance for a long period of time, which can deteriorate spine's structure as well as place them at risk of cardiovascular diseases. By making their body moving, children's muscles are increased, which decreases the constraints on their spines and lessens their chance of skeleton destruction. Likewise, children's blood pressure is reduced, thereby eliminating the risk of heart stroke.

Another gain for kids if they increase their time to excersice is that their academic progression can be facillitated. It is proven that people's mental health are in a close correlation with their physical health. This means that physical activities not only benefit young people in terms of boosting their stamina, endurance, flexibility but also stimulate the development of their brain. Given that young student's mind are fostered, they may find their studying easier, thereby achieving better performance at schools.

Admittedly, there are still occasions when investing in learning instead of doing exercise is more beneficial for young students. This is especially the case for those who are preparing for important exams, which require students' complete attention and effort. In this case, doing excercises in the meantime seems irrelevant. However, preparation for tests may be needed only for a few times a year, therefore the need for taking part in physical activities is still crucial.

In sum, if chidren can practice additonal physical activities, their potential health issues related to study can be ameliorated, and their academic achievement may be enhanced. Thus, I side with the view that children should do more activities in order to improve their physical well-being.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 253, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...it and maintain their stance for a long period of time, which can deteriorate spines structure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41124260355 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77012989247 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568047337278 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0274880021 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.3125 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176873484858 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680480217814 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056350868007 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109259374948 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340069101571 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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