People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our life generally more comfortable but it is a pity many traditional values have been lost on the way to such materialism.To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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People nowadays work hard to buy more things. This has made our life generally more comfortable but it is a pity many traditional values have been lost on the way to such materialism.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

At present, people are becoming too materialistic and working hard so that they can afford more amenities. This is making our lives cozier but simultaneously a lot of precious ancestral values are becoming a casualty of it. I strongly agree with the notion that, commodity fetishism is the main reason why we have lost a good number of ancestral norms.

There are scores of reasons behind this; firstly, excessive obsession for materials could derail a person from cultural ethics and values. When a person becomes seduced by materialism, he or she tries to possess it by hook or by crook and does not hesitate to adopt the unethical modes for it. This is the first blow to our hereditary values of which morality comprises the most durable part. Secondly, the person who is obsessed with belongings often prioritizes it over domestic life. As an indispensable consequence, it creates cracks and fissures in their family life. Any bad impact on the domestic life adversely affects the social structure as well as the culture.

However, the case is not exactly same for all the people who work hard as well as buy things to make their lives easeful. There are ample of examples of successful people who have established a sound balance among all aspects of their lives. Thus, they have created their own way of fostering the ancestral values as well as responding to the crying needs of the materialistic world.

Finally, I pen down recapitulating that extreme quest for materials creates imbalances in our moral & social lives and thus brings ruin to our conventional values and principles.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01123595506 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.763371469 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632958801498 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5217739733 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.923076923 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19180051514 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613755859829 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313994076044 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106630316978 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436828378894 0.056905535591 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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