People spend large amounts of time and money on clothes, hairstyles and makeup to change their appearance.
Is it important for people to be concerned about the way they look? What are the consequences of focussing on physical appearance?
People dedicate their time and money to change their looks with hairstyles, makeup and clothes. Although physical appearance is important to some extent it is not as important as personality. And people's obsession with looking good creates serious consequences.
People have always worried about their looks and wanted to be more attractive. It is indeed important to look decent in some places such as work and school. The way we dress up and do our hair show people around us that we respect them. For instance, if we wear unformal clothes and untidy hair to an important meeting, people would think we don't care for them or even disrespect them. However, people like who we are not how we dress or do our hair. So in the end it is our personality and how we treat others is more important than how we look.
Focussing on the physical appearance too much may have drawbacks. Firstly, buying clothes and makeup or going to the hairdresser requires large amounts of money. Therefore, doing these too often may challenge people financially, they might end up in debt. My friend, for example, used her credit card to buy designer clothes but couldn't pay off her debt in time. Furthermore, when people only care about looks, they judge people based on their appearance rather than their personality. This superficial assessment is not right, since people are much more than their physical appearances.
In conclusion, looking good is necessary for some situations but it's not the most important aspect of our lives. And spending lots of money and time on making ourselves more attractive might put an economical burden on us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ks with hairstyles, makeup and clothes. Although physical appearance might be important ...
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Line 2, column 342, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...mportant meeting, people would think we dont care for them or even disrespect them. ...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...credit card to buy designer clothes but couldnt pay off her debt in time. Furthermore, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92028985507 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66156174888 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.3776392571 49.4020404114 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8823529412 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2352941176 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423321152167 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129202522208 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073177670116 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247162885703 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106665405031 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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