At the present time, the population of some contries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages ?
Nowadays, in some contries believed the population of young adults is higher than older people. In this situation I completely agree with this situation because it has more advantages rather than drawback for some reasons.
On the one hand, the advantage of large numbers of youth people can drive the force of an economy. It is because they tend to be more productive and creative than older people, and thus are more likely to bring change and innovation in their countries. For example, UH. Automotive great advantage for a country because a strong economy offers people a high standard of living. And then the young are born with willingness to learn new things, encouraging them to adapt to non stop changes in the world. For that reason, the nation with a high quantity of youths will never lag behind technological revolutions.
However, the growth of amount of proportion of young people can lead to high unemployment among them. It can be seen that most older people already have their careers figured out. They either have stable corporate jobs or run their businesses. In comparison, many youth adults, particularly those who just graduated from university, are still looking for jobs. They have many competitors for the same postition who hope getting jobs. And the second, increase in population criminal activities will prevail if we do not invest enough in education for children and young people.
In conclusion, I believe that the domination of young people in population becomes several benefits, In my opinion, this demographic transition leads to more drawbacks.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...loyment among them. It can be seen that most older people already have their careers figur...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, so, still, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12355212355 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72369125626 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8106264851 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4666666667 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235918547944 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719019401091 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715528021373 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151799785704 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824714517437 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...loyment among them. It can be seen that most older people already have their careers figur...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, so, still, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12355212355 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72369125626 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8106264851 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4666666667 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2666666667 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235918547944 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719019401091 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715528021373 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151799785704 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824714517437 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.