At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent decades, young population become more ubiquitous through the world has been receiving a great deal of attention. Although this trend is not without demerits, its
upsides will justify these.
There are enormous drawbacks young population can bring to the modern society. first, since countries has more teenagers, those nations will get into debt. In fact, juniors population boom required an improve of facilities such as up-scaled schools, hospitals, which leads to a huge money governments have to put into for remaining the police of countries purpose. second, by giving birth more children, parents will be easy to get noble than when they have no child. this means that, until babies totally grow up, they takes a whole host of work ages of parents, thereby these people are forced to work hard to make a living or whether lack of finance to nourish their juniors, which prevents each current families develop their duties.

However, some reasonable advantages will address those downsides of young population. first, in order to flourish national economy, the young population is necessary factor. For example, china, a country has incredible rich young workers to boost its productivity thanks to the population strategy of government, leading china become the top countries around the world. second, if a nation has a large number of old people, its will be vulnerable and become disappear now and down the road. this means that, the nation generally will be lack of the implement in most fields, which makes many factories, office posts have to being closed.
In conclusion, the benefits of this situation will be far more significant. By invest budget in education qualification, the governments will help the prosperity of countries in the long-term.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... this trend is not without demerits, its upsides will justify these. There are e...
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...lation can bring to the modern society. first, since countries has more teenagers, th...
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... fact, juniors population boom required an improve of facilities such as up-scaled schools...
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...aining the police of countries purpose. second, by giving birth more children, parents...
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...get noble than when they have no child. this means that, until babies totally grow u...
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...hat, until babies totally grow up, they takes a whole host of work ages of parents, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24912280702 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66806057752 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642105263158 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2958665746 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.857142857 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151709405274 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053811023946 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295485996257 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720357271565 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473208075107 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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