Q1: Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the issue of converting green spaces into residential areas has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities, such as gardens and parks, near the central area of the city by residential buildings in order to reduce time devoted to commuting to and from work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove environment-friendly amenities near the city business district so as to establish apartment blocks. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens and parks makes it possible for working adults to take a rest that help them unwind during their lunchtime with greater ease. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for these amenities, a multitude of working people would have difficulty alleviating stress, exerting a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to substitute a myriad of skyscrapers accommodating citizens for green areas. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if a large number of employees residing close to their workplaces travel to work by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to experience traffic congestion, allowing citizens to have an improved standard of living. This is partly because the number of cars on roads would remarkably decrease. Moreover, depriving workers of less time dedicated to commuting to and from work enables them to focus more on their work. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroying green places close to the city centre and erect housing estates are necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...enities near the city business district so as to establish apartment blocks. Proponents ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...s the most compelling reason is that if a large number of employees residing close to their workp...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroyi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24702380952 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94290764857 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616071428571 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0527613676 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.928571429 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278235833532 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738953181095 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561129406575 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148507989285 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401394462777 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.