Q1 Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters but others disagree Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Q1: Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Recently, the issue of converting green spaces into residential areas has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities close to the city centre, such as gardens and parks, by residential buildings in order to reduce time devoted to commuting to and from work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.

On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove environment-friendly amenities near the central area of the city so as to erect apartment blocks do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens as well as parks makes it possible for working adults to take a rest helping them unwind during their lunchtime with greater ease. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for parks and gardens for employees, they would have difficulty alleviating the level of stress, which can even exert a detrimental influence on their work performance.

My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to substitute skyscrapers accommodating citizens for green places near the central business district. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if a multitude of workers residing close to the CBD travel to their workplace by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to suffer from traffic congestion, making it possible for the masses to have an improved standard of living. This is because the number of personal vehicles on roads would remarkably decrease. Moreover, depriving working people of less time dedicated to travel to work enables them to focus more on their occupations. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroying green areas near the city centre and establishing housing estates are necessary for the reasons discussed above.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20338983051 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91781519363 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610169491525 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8865809074 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.571428571 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283397252026 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771414047504 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612965424166 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153454373484 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514648984681 0.056905535591 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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