Question: The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What are the reasons for the growth of overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?
There is a growing trend towards more people contracting serious life-threatening medical issues as a result of obesity. In this essay, I would first closely examine the reasons before suggesting a viable solution to this negative trend.
The reality that more people are getting overweight can be ascribed to two primary reasons: a surge in fast food consumption and sedentary lifestyles led by many. As for the former, junk food has been proven to be high in cholesterol and addictive, which is detrimental to human’s body. Due to its appealing packaging and scrumptious flavor, these foods tend to be consumed on a grand scale, leading me to believe that fast food consumption is one of the chief causes behind an increase in obesity. In addition to harmful food consumption, lifestyles lacking physical exercises is another factor resulting in higher obesity rates. Significantly more people dedicate themselves to pursuing their enormous goal in life, potentially neglecting the quality time spent on physical activities such as yoga, karate, walking, among others. This, as a result, may contribute to the rise in more overweight people.
After exploring two chief rationales behind a rise in obesity rates, I would suggest a feasible approach to tackling this situation, chief of which are heightened public awareness. The onus should be on the government to mount more health-related campaigns, conveying helpful information as to the detriment of increasing fast food consumption and people’s modern inactive lifestyles. By doing so, some people may be more aware of what healthy habits are, thereby somewhat minimizing the chances of being obese.
In conclusion, I believe that there are two primary reasons attributed to higher obesity rates, including large amounts of consumed fast food and passive ways of living. Moreover, a viable solution to address this problems could be the government’s duty to organize more health campaigns.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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... Moreover, a viable solution to address this problems could be the government’s duty...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, as for, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41830065359 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97348270297 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3760430462 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.538461538 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24266246136 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836730355769 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542360412578 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138897358561 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263579067224 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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