The range of technology is increasing the gap between the poor and the rich, do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

The range of technology is increasing the gap between the poor and the rich, do you agree or disagree?

The development of technology has undoubtedly been a blessing for human civilization during the passed decades. However, some people argue that it is widening the gap between the rich and the poor. Personally, I find it hard for myself to agree with this idea for the following reasons.

Technology, in reality, has offered some added chances for the poor to change their fate. For instance, some people who encounter some difficulties such as serious disease nowadays often ask for financial aid from warm-hearted strangers through the Internet. Moreover, thanks to the wide range and high efficiency of information delivery, a lot of charity clubs and commonweal organizations are established to help the poor in remote areas in many aspects. Therefore, to some extent, technology is indeed benefiting the poor and narrowing their gap between the rich.

More importantly, the development of technology has lowered the price of some products, making them affordable for poor people. For example, mobile phone used to be a rich-only product for its high cost in manufacturing. However, it has become popularized nowadays as a result of the development of technology,which has further provided the poor with more access to information and resources.

However, it is not totally nonsense to say that technology is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor, especially when it comes to high technology products with high prices which only the rich can afford. Meanwhile, indeed the rich still have more access to resources which can bring them spectacular profits in this information age than the poor. Nevertheless, I think it is a limp opposition to the remarkable advantages of technology, and it is the social system more than technology, that is the root cause of the gap.

In conclusion, the good technology brings to us is undeniable. Under proper use of technology, the human being can benefit perpetually from the advancement of it.

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Average: 6.3 (4 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
... result of the development of technology,which has further provided the poor with more...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221590909091 0.247107183377 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.125 0.155533422707 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.119318181818 0.0946595960268 126% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0596590909091 0.0501214627716 119% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0482954545455 0.0437548338989 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122159090909 0.122226691241 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0397727272727 0.0403226058552 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.05745753428 2.80594681477 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0340909090909 0.0326793684256 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.119318181818 0.0861772015684 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00852272727273 0.021408717616 40% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0170454545455 0.011925033212 143% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1953.0 1933.35771543 101% => OK
No of words: 314.0 316.048096192 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.21974522293 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.353503184713 0.374742101984 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286624203822 0.28420135186 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.229299363057 0.203846283523 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.18152866242 0.137316102897 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05745753428 2.80594681477 109% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.037074148 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53821656051 0.56093040696 96% => OK
Word variations: 56.1845556386 60.7387585426 93% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9333333333 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.615194223 49.517814964 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.2 127.492653851 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.814263465372 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 49.5957537155 49.1944974215 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.64634146341 1.69124875643 97% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.584910642551 0.332605444948 176% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106531631734 0.102741220458 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.063135602956 0.0668466124924 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.620236756507 0.534860350844 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.117787957295 0.148594505496 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.281810870735 0.134430193775 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144734188214 0.0742795772207 195% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.43404243139 0.324371583561 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00977306576409 0.0638462369009 15% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.41839546485 0.228012699653 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866804099568 0.058150111329 149% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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