The rate of unemployment in some countries is high. Because of this, there is no need to complete an education beyond a primary school level.
Nowadays, the majority nations in the world are suffering the unemployment problem. A proportion considers that in term of this phenomenon the completion beyond the primary education is unnecessary. Personally, a sharp disagreement is my point of views. In this essay, information and evidence are given to clarify my portion of views.
Firstly, only completing primary school does not help the society to solve the unemployment situation as the number of illiteracy people who are willing to work the manual labors is dramatic high. As a result, graduated primary school people only cope with the difficulty in finding a manual work but also have nearly zero chance of competing with others who had the higher education. Apparently, advancing academic level may be a personal choice of students, but is highly recommended to avoid being unemployed.
Secondly, the drastic gap from finishing primary school to the actual working period is an extended period of time. Normally, the legal working age for unrestricted works is from 18 years old, and by the time of completing primary school, children are only 14 years old. Consequently, living four years without proper education or guidance may lead children to be dragged into the social evils as their parents are often busy of working to keep them under appropriate surveillance.
To conclude, the government of different countries is attempting to reduce the unemployment rate over the time, however eliminating children from beyond primary education fails to be the solution. In this modern society, the higher of education people achieve, the more significant chance of finding a good job will appear.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended avoiding'.
Suggestion: recommended avoiding
...sonal choice of students, but is highly recommended to avoid being unemployed. Secondly, the dras...
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Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...he actual working period is an extended period of time. Normally, the legal working age for un...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31439393939 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89716770196 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602272727273 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3751933892 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.916666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280287062433 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924110598494 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071987647535 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156010747632 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356741932163 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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