A recent newspaper article reports that a I4-year-old boy who seriously
destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of sent to the
prison, do you think this is right? Or the young criminals should be sent to the
jail.
Punishment for under-18-year-old children has envolved as a major topic of concern in modern
society. Some agree that the penalty for the young boy is enough to let him aware of his guilty
action, however, I firmly believe that his heavy crime is really serious that also need to put him in a
prison.
To a certain extent, I agree that cleaning streets is a suitable penalty for the boy. First, the teenager
boy, at his age, does not have awareness of the consequences from his illegal action fully. The young
boy just considered the result as distractions to the whole students on study instead of heavy
damages to school’s properties as well as the safety of teachers, students and all staffs. Second,
cleaning streets is not easy and require a hard-working attitude and a good health to do in any
weather condition. Therefore, this job could take a lot of labor and time so that might heavy enough
for his age to receive.
However, I’m of the opinion the young criminal, beside community services, should also be kept in
jail. The first reason is that although the boy is too young to take any serious punishment, he needs
to take responsiblity for his terrible action. Some heavy penalties like a prison sentence would let
him know how severe his action is and avoid committing crime again. The second reason comes from
a rehabilitation program in prison. The boy might have opportunities to improve his behavior during
attending the program and understand his conviction. This way would give the boy a full aspect to
keep a good behavior after in jail.
All in all, community services might be a good penalty for juvenile crimes, however, I believe that if
the crime leads to heavy damage, a prison sentence is need to put in this situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...titude and a good health to do in any weather condition. Therefore, this job could ta...
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...r and time so that might heavy enough for his age to receive. However, I'm...
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...nity services, should also be kept in jail. The first reason is that although the ...
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...ties like a prison sentence would let him know how severe his action is and avoid...
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...e again. The second reason comes from a rehabilitation program in prison. The b...
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...nities to improve his behavior during attending the program and understand his convicti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93770491803 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73235759312 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0488054624 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.571428571 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.38176352705 434% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171129017288 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617063004453 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0261163277692 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0533449364586 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298443608169 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.